Final Task: Problem

Recently over the half term we have had our clip looked and comments made to it. We recieved feedback on a number of things such as the titles and credits where they don't flow through and are technically in the wrong order. We also recieved feedback on sound where we have not included any musical track and the sound at the minute is not very clear for the audience to understand. Also the lighting is less intrusive where it doesn't look dark enough. The actual film does not make sense and there is very little editing to make it in the higher level band.

From this we have decided to shoot the film again even though we only have 3 week period to shoot and edit it. We have decided this because we feel that the even though the point of view may attract the audience more it doesn't let us vary the shots we should have. Other things we must look at are the Titles and credits which we need to improve as we didn't get the exact image we wanted of these and also the content of them. We have reviewed the story and decided to add a bit more to the clip in order to make sure the audience understands whats happening within it. This clip is mainly for teenagers and so we have decided to use to including things such as a girl in school uniform, emails and getting frequent texts. This means it will appeal more to them.
We have decided to start the story by a girl walking ranging from a long shot to a close up. This means we are already using our variety of shots. Then the girl looking back and seeing a person that is following her. We are going to add an effect of the camera shaking as she runs past from the person. She then is paranoid and looking to the side as she searches in her bag for the keys. Then including a action match of her opening the door and closing it. Then the girl is seen crying and falls to the floor. The girl then recieves a text messgae and we have decided to still add a point of view when she reads the text. She then throws it on the floor and a low angle is shown of her running off. Then the camera zooms in to the phone to show that it is blank and that she was imaging it. Then she is seen running along the hall and into the bathroom. She then throws her bag down and looks at herself in the mirror. She then hears a noise and looks to the side and then to the mirror where the girl appears. Then the girl searches in the cupboard and gets pills out. The other girl shouts out go on and we have not yet decided whether she should take the pills or we keep the audience in suspense and bring the title up to keep the audience interested.